【自创格.一七一】闻诵满江红有感

                

                   夜                    

                  朦胧     

                晚风轻                                   

                蝉声轻唱                                                    

               谁诵满江红                               

              抑扬顿挫有致                             

             如闻金戈铁马鸣

              贺兰山在何处                             

               壮志捣黄龙                               

                精忠报国                                  

                 徒留下                                   

                  万世                                     

                   名                                        

                                        2010.6.30

秀水老师：这篇稿为什么一发就乱？没法看！是何原因？请帮解决。多谢！